[Other] Collaboration Comments

[demonickilla]

(This text RPG looks awsome I hope it works out well)

[Bloodshot]

(This sounds cool, I will definitely submit.)

[Marrden]

(You need to PM Vampire Jade, Lucky Joe, and Silitor to see if they want to send an application. They are all superb writers. See Silitor's story and/or Text RPG if you want proof. As for Vamp and Lucky Joe check pages 45-56 of the Continue the Story thread for their posts. God I wish I was good enough to be in this thread.)

[Aval]

Interested... Mucho interestante...

[Bloodshot]

(I'm not always a good writer, but my PM was pretty good, if I say so myself.):P

[Marrden]

Yes, but if I submit I know that I'll have to live with the embarrassment of being turned down and the fact that I knew I would be turned down anyway.

[Aval]

Might I just ask how all these characters are going to fit together once the thread has started? Or is the intro post thing just to prove we can RP and we are going to just make a new one once it starts?

[Bloodshot]

Yes, but if I submit I know that I'll have to live with the embarrassment of being turned down and the fact that I knew I would be turned down anyway.

It doesn't hurt to try...

[demonickilla]

Marrden don't worry about it you should try out. I mean you're a much better Text RPer than me and I PMed him.

[Wadling]

Yes, but if I submit I know that I'll have to live with the embarrassment of being turned down and the fact that I knew I would be turned down anyway.

There's no embarrassment in being turned down man, I know for a fact that you're a good writer. Give it a shot, see where it gets you. If you get turned down, who cares? At least you tried. It's not like a big foot is going to come down and crush you.

[Victory]

The only time there's shame in losing is when you mouth off before. Which I tend to do a lot, but rarely seriously. I do tend to boast a little, somtimes, but when I do, I sure as hell don't let them prove me wrong/prove that I'm an asshole :P

Anyway, I'll send you a wall of text soon enough :P

[Bloodshot]

i sent a fortress:P

[Varthonai]

Might I just ask how all these characters are going to fit together once the thread has started? Or is the intro post thing just to prove we can RP and we are going to just make a new one once it starts?

That's a very good question. No, the intro post is not just to prove you can RP--the character in your intro post will be the character in the story.

And if you wonder how it will all fit together now, it will only increase your amazement later. So, huzzah.

[Bloodshot]

(BTW, that was a joke about the fortress, I wasn't bragging)

[Varthonai]

I've put up my character's introduction for you guys to see.

Notes: it may not be exactly clear what your character may be, but we should get some idea and we should be interested in learning more. There's clear motivation and some development of personality. For the particularly observant there may even be some more specific clues about the character's nature hidden in the subtext. You don't have to take this kind of approach with your character, but it's the option I've gone with and if any of you want to try it you certainly can.

[Lucky Joe]

(You need to PM Vampire Jade, Lucky Joe, and Silitor to see if they want to send an application. They are all superb writers. See Silitor's story and/or Text RPG if you want proof. As for Vamp and Lucky Joe check pages 45-56 of the Continue the Story thread for their posts. God I wish I was good enough to be in this thread.)

(Hey, I never knew I was that good of a writer. I always thought I sucked O.o. Anyways, I might as well try out, the application will be sent sometime tomorrow or today... probably not today, as I'm tired.

And... does this have one set story line, or is it just multiple stories in one? I read the guidelines. Just want to know if we all go our separate ways or we all converge at one time just to screw around.)

[Varthonai]

Couple of things.

1) Don't bother with the (parenthetical text) guys, really. The story hasn't officially begun yet, and I'm just going to delete all of these auxiliary out-of-game posts once the RP kicks off anyway.

2) @ Lucky Joe, YES, the stories will merge, though we will begin individually.

[cokeman]

Looks good, but on the story part...It is just not that interesting to read about 2 people using such complex words to talk about cloacas and dicks...

[Tyemdi]

(Looks great. I'll send you a PM tomorrow. Too busy now; that is, if you have spaces tomorrow.)

[Razgriz]

(You need to PM Vampire Jade, Lucky Joe, and Silitor to see if they want to send an application. They are all superb writers. See Silitor's story and/or Text RPG if you want proof. As for Vamp and Lucky Joe check pages 45-56 of the Continue the Story thread for their posts. God I wish I was good enough to be in this thread.)

Heh, I just try to RP. I might submit an intro post or probably not. I got my hands full as it is. If I do consider applying, it might take me time - If I do have the time... If players were already chosen before I was able send the intro post. I have no regrets.

[Silence]

(PM sent.)

[Varthonai]

I edited and lengthened my intro post slightly, guys. I don't think it was clear enough what my character was before and was therefore setting a bad example.

Apologies. I was sort of sleepy when I wrote it.

[Aval]

Is there a deadline for this thing?

[Varthonai]

There's no official deadline. We'll probably start once we get four or five really great submissions, but people can keep submitting after that and they'll get in if they're good.

[demonickilla]

I made my intro post better 'cause it kinda sucked because i wrote it 1:00 in the morning and i just realized how much it sucked so i made it better.

[Bloodshot]

1 minute or 1 hour?

[ShadowDancer]

He means 1:00 am.

[demonickilla]

Yeah I mean 1:00 am...... What else would it be?

[Bloodshot]

1 min. or 1 hour

[demonickilla]

1 HOUR!!!!! Gosh how many times i gotta tell ya.

And also Varth have you got any great submissions yet?

[Rabbi106]

(I'm definitely gonna submit.)

(EDIT: I PM'd you, Varth. It's pretty long, but it's epic.)

[Bloodshot]

1 HOUR!!!!! Gosh how many times i gotta tell ya.

...you never said that...

[Wadling]

You guys can feel free to PM me too guys, so that Varth doesn't have to keep forwarding them over here.

[Killervirus]

I should probably ask this in PM, but whatever: IS an undead okay? I mean, like, an intelligent one, not the brainless zombie thingies.

That is humanoid. Well, was :(

[Tyemdi]

(It's actually harder to think of an idea than I thought it will be. May have to send it by the weekend.)

[Silence]

I should probably ask this in PM, but whatever: IS an undead okay? I mean, like, an intelligent one, not the brainless zombie thingies.

That is humanoid. Well, was :(

It is OK, but I already sent in a vampire character, so you'd probably do best to stay away from that.

[Varthonai]

I should probably ask this in PM, but whatever: IS an undead okay? I mean, like, an intelligent one, not the brainless zombie thingies.

That is humanoid. Well, was :(

Everything is ok but the ones that are most likely to actually be accepted are the ones that are creative and well-written.

[Killervirus]

Good.

[Silitor]

I'll PM you ASAP. It would be nice to be in one of Varth's RPGs. Save me a place xD.

I should pm you by tmrw, if possible. this is a mighty interesting RPG.

[Razgriz]

It is OK, but I already sent in a vampire character, so you'd probably do best to stay away from that.

*Cuts idea from the list...* :(

[Silence]

*Cuts idea from the list...* :(

Sorry man. I just think that it'll be better for the both of us if our ideas are more unique.

[Killervirus]

I think it might be a good idea if everyone who has already submitted posted who or what their characters is. I'd hate to see my character similar to someone else's.

[Silence]

Varth doesn't like the idea. He says that if a character is similar, but better written, it still can be accepted. He doesn't want better writers throwing away ideas because weaker writers already used them.

[Killervirus]

Oh. Well, that makes sense. (it's Varthonaish!)

EDIT: Just sent mine. had to cut it in two parts :(

[Varthonai]

We've gotten some very good submissions, but there is one consistent problem: they are ALL, with only one exception, action scenes.

Seriously, apart from that single one I mentioned, every single submission has involved a physical attack of some kind. It's getting annoying and we will probably be more sympathetic towards posts that do not begin with an action scene. I know it's tempting to establish your character as a badass motherf*cker right from the get-go, but it's totally unnecessary and it's extremely predictable.

Thank you.

[demonickilla]

Does that mean that you will probally use the ones without action scenes. If so i'm f*cked. Shoulda put more though into mine. *Hits self in face.*

[Silence]

Varth, would you like it if I edited mine a bit?

[demonickilla]

Yeah me too.

[Wadling]

Does that mean that you will probally not use the ones without action scenes. If so i'm f*cked. Shoulda put more though into mine. *Hits self in face.*

That's the opposite of what he's saying actually.

[demonickilla]

Yeah I know gotta edit that. I mean does that mean that the ones without action scene will probally be used.

[Silence]

Yeah I know gotta edit that. I mean does that mean that the ones without action scene will probally be used.

I actually find that action scenes using people that aren't total badasses are the best. For instance, someone like (I'm going off assumptions here) your character using creativity and tools rather than skill and weapons.

[demonickilla]

I don't think my person is badass.

[Varthonai]

If Wad or I want anyone to actually edit his / her intro post before Wad and I consider using it, we have already PM'd them about it. I was just mentioning it for future submissions.

[Rabbi106]

Guilty as charged....

[Silence]

I don't think my person is badass.

No, I mean I was using you as an example of a character that is not badass.

[Wadling]

Can I hear you say UPDATE? Yes, I think I can.

Latest news, there has been an official accepted submission, it will be being edited into the first post, along with my own intro.

Anyways, second and final thing, there are a couple of pending edits. If all goes according to plan, who knows? Maybe they'll get in.

That's all folks, check out the front page for future and recent edits!

[Silence]

Can I hear you say UPDATE? Yes, I think I can.

Latest news, there has been an official accepted submission, it will be being edited into the first post, along with my own intro.

Anyways, second and final thing, there are a couple of pending edits. If all goes according to plan, who knows? Maybe they'll get in.

That's all folks, check out the front page for future and recent edits!

Sweet. Funny that both of the thread authors are both playing viruses, just different types.

[Varthonai]

DOUBLE UPDATE! Thanks to rapid re-editing skillz on the part of Silence, he has now been accepted as our lead vampire-analogue protagonist.

Now that we have four major starting characters, we are going to start building The Map of the world that the Collaboration will take place in. Silence, Angua, we will contact both of you via PM for input.

[Silence]

Fuck yes. Epic win. Win will you contact me?

[Bloodshot]

Wait...you already have four characters?

[Silence]

Wait...you already have four characters?

Apparently. Me, that new guy, and the mods.

[Bloodshot]

Oh, ok.

[Lucky Joe]

Congratz to the winners.


Now I have a question, can people still send in applications or can we not submit anymore?

[Silence]

Now I have a question, can people still send in applications or can we not submit anymore?

You can still submit.

[Lucky Joe]

Sweet...might as well finish up my application.

[Varthonai]

Our next winner is Polo. Congratz, friend.

We will probably begin the game shortly after the next submission we pick.

[Bloodshot]

OK.*crosses fingers*please be me, please be me

[Rabbi106]

Amazing. Already two pages and the game hasn't started :D

Oh, well. I deserve any rejec-HEY! Who are you two, anyway? You just chanced upon your new positions. Just cuz I don't have a colored username doesn't mean I have to succumb to your lame contest. It's no fun. You're making a club, and that'll only be fun for the six people who are allowed. And don't you think it would be fair to give up your character positions? You already control THE WORLD. We won't know if you're making rules for the entire world, or merely for the success of your characters. I say this would be a lot more fun if it weren't exclusive. Just think about it, 'kay?

[Polo]

I somewhat agree slightly with Rabbi, it kinda would be fun with more people.

[Rabbi106]

Woah..I didn't expect that. Thanks for the support, Polo!

[Silitor]

I don't know... The more people there are, the less manageable it will be. Fun is a totally different factor. Anyway, it's Vart's choice. I wonder who will be the last person?

[Rabbi106]

It'll be cool to find out. It would be easier to mod, because, as I take it, Varth AND Wad are mods.

[Varthonai]

Oh, well. I deserve any rejec-HEY! Who are you two, anyway? You just chanced upon your new positions.

If you believe that either Wadling or I really acquired our positions by chance, and if you believe that another user is more deserving of either of our roles, feel free to talk to our superiors about it. I'm sure that the other mods and / or admins will be happy to hear you out.


Just cuz I don't have a colored username doesn't mean I have to succumb to your lame contest.

No, it doesn't. That's why this is voluntary. I'm pretty sure you submitted out of your own free will.


It's no fun. You're making a club, and that'll only be fun for the six people who are allowed.

Yes, Rabbi, you've hit the metaphorical nail on its metaphorical head. This is an exclusive RPG. I explained that in the very first post. I created this RPG knowing full well that not all of DQ would be able to participate. But if I hadn't created it, well, guess what? NONE of DQ would have been able to participate.


And don't you think it would be fair to give up your character positions?

Assuming you mean "geographic locations" when you say "positions"... yes. We plan on doing exactly that as soon as we finish making the map.


You already control THE WORLD. We won't know if you're making rules for the entire world, or merely for the success of your characters.

"Success" of our characters? We have no goals here other than good storytelling, Rabbi. If you're looking for a game that's about competition and constant monster murder and XP gain, I suggest that you go find yourself a good D&D gamer group. There's no shortage of games like that, which is why it seemed pointless for us to create another.


I say this would be a lot more fun if it weren't exclusive. Just think about it, 'kay?

Rabbi, I have given this RPG extensive thought already and decided that exclusivity will promote quality. By making it exclusive, Wadling and I are creating a controlled environment that can focus intensely on individual character development. We don't want a plot-driven story with dozens of one-dimensional characters, and we certainly don't want to have to babysit the players who just want to blow things up and have huge battles.

You had the same chance of getting in as everyone else. If you still want to participate, you can always ask for criticism of your submission and re-submit it after editing until we accept it, so shut up, sit down, and stop whining before I slap you.

[Bloodshot]

When will you have the next player?

[Varthonai]

When we've finished ruling out some other selections we've received.

It's tough competition. Some of these are pretty good but could be improved. We're going to be sending more recommended edit notices to people soon.

[Tyemdi]

(May not have time to finish the story. Sorry, I'm backing out.)

[Killervirus]

Although a club of only qualified players would be good, in a way, I'm more concerned that the RPG might feel a bit 'off' with only 6 players or less, considering some of the other RPG's had like 10-15 people posting.

I guess that depends how the RPG will be, and I trust Varth and Wadling with that. They've become mods for a reason, y'know.


EDIT: OMFG NOOOOOOOOO. I accidently deleted my beatifull edited intro post :sad:

[Killing_Time]

Aight I'm getting ideas in my head so guys if you perhaps give me like a day or so I can submit it since I'm constantly on restricted internet time.
Yeah I wanna get back into RPG biznis, and I've sort of found a few solutions around things here and there.

[Razgriz]

I decided to back out (Yep, I almost decided to join.) due to my lack of creativity in creating a character, Varth pretty much knows that. I give my wishes to those who submitted and congratulations to those who were chosen. :)

[demonickilla]

I actually like the exclusiveness of this RPG. Even tho I probally won't get in, It's really exciting to see if you're in or out. And if you're out you say. "All well, atleast I tryed". And congratualate the winners.

[Hunter_Killer]

exactlly, I find high detailed RPGS exciting to try and enter and, in the end, if I failed to adjust to the standards I only improve my outlook to make a better fix in the end. In truth it is all good fun.

[Varthonai]

So far we've got the playful and naïve dreamer (Wil Amai), the bored everyman (Tau), the girl with a mysterious past (Jaela), the badass noir-style antihero (Robin), and even an ostensible villain (Polo's unnamed character.)

Looking through submissions, I see that the badass noir-style antihero is a very popular choice, and the ostensible villain is a close second. I'd like to remind everyone that we are looking for character diversity here, and will (probably) not accept more than one of a similar character type.

[castlemanic]

ostensible?

[Polo]

ostensible?

Pretending to be something else:

He looks pretty happy, but that's not the case as he's actually pretty depressed.

[Killervirus]

So far we've got the playful and naïve dreamer (Wil Amai), the bored everyman (Tau), the girl with a mysterious past (Jaela), the badass noir-style antihero (Robin), and even an ostensible villain (Polo's unnamed character.)

Looking through submissions, I see that the badass noir-style antihero is a very popular choice, and the ostensible villain is a close second. I'd like to remind everyone that we are looking for character diversity here, and will (probably) not accept more than one of a similar character type.
Does mine fit in badass antihero? If he is, I didn't meant to make him so D:

[castlemanic]

Well, i doubt my character falls into any of those categories then, I hope not atleast.

[demonickilla]

Well my character's more of a survivalist. He does'nt hit them head on, instead he uses the tools he has and the situation to stay on top.

[Hunter_Killer]

well mine is a detached and uncaring assassin who really only looks for the next task and something that can finally challenge his skills rather than waisting effort on weak and pathetic fools.

[Silence]

well mine is a detached and uncaring assassin who really only looks for the next task and something that can finally challenge his skills rather than waisting effort on weak and pathetic fools.

Could you possible go more cliche'? Not that mine is a shining example of individuality, but really?

[castlemanic]

Personally, both Demonic's and Hunter's characters emit a sort of heroic attitude about them. Similarly they both always find a way to get to the top and they also seem as if they have no weaknesses.

this is all in my opinion of course, anyone else can feel free to disagree with me.

[Silence]

always find a way to get to the top and they also seem as if they have no weaknesses.

Actually, specialized weapons (blessed or silver bullets) could easily take down my character.

[castlemanic]

lol you posted like a second before i did silence, lol, i was talking about Hunters and Demonicks characters.

[demonickilla]

Hahaha even I thought you were talking to silence, CM.:biggrin5:

And my character is'nt really in a survival situation like in the forest or somthing, He just uses his skills like that.... kind of.

Well like he does'nt like to hit them head on he thinks it through, i guess that's what i'm trying to say.

[Silence]

lol you posted like a second before i did silence, lol, i was talking about Hunters and Demonicks characters.

Ah. My bad.

[castlemanic]

No worries Silence, and demonic, after your post, I think ill edit my post to make sure other people understand in future xD.

[Polo]

My characters weakness would be his restricted movement, or so you might think. ;)

[Wadling]

And then, from above, a plane soared through the sky.

"What is that?" Someone shouted "WHAT IS THAT!"

"Oh no, it's-" Another managed to get out before being crushed by a giant sign bearing the words

UPDATE!

Okee dokee, Castlemanic's submission has been officially accepted. That's a full six members let through folks. Can you make it through the firey gates of the submission barrier? Who knows, anything can happen.

Anyways, CM's intro has been added to the first page, hip hip?

[Silence]

I can't find the post...

Edit: Never mind, silly me!

[Hunter_Killer]

think what you want. There is more to him than that but i keep it close to the chest since I don't like giving out huge bios that give away every detail.

[...I'm not telling you!]

Good god!...look at all those poor comments. *looks at Vathonai*...what are you doing with that Keyboard?...No wait-noooooooo!

[Hunter_Killer]

meh... I'm not even 100% motivated to really come back since another forum I'm on opened a similar section and I'm, sadly, one of the 2 only well-versed people in there to really know how to start shit up. Basides, after reviewing my character I realised that bringing out the one I made in a sevear depression where I get kicks for brutally murdering innocent bystanders is a major idea flaw on my part.

>.>'

[...I'm not telling you!]

(I apologize for posting this in the comments section, i saw the word collaboration and accidentally posted in there)

No, actually you DID post it in the RP thread, after I'd already told you in PM that the Collaboration RP is CLOSED and not accepting further submissions. So we moved it here.

Then you posted this COPY of it there, and we moved it again. This was AFTER I already told you that it was closed in PM. In short, it's annoying and it's against the rules, so please stop before we infract you some more.

Incidentally, even if we were allowing submissions, you would PM them to Wad or me. You wouldn't post them in the thread itself. Please read the rules that were clearly stated in the first post of the RP thread.

--Varth

Don’t worry he’s not a human all the way through . BTW, it’s long…also, there’s a language bank at the bottom for the language I created
I woke up in my poorly made bed to the sound of screaming and crying, and odd high pitch sounds I had never heard before. I awoke slowly, but when the sounds around me lost their muffled textures, fear and adrenalin forced my eyes open, I looked out of the window; there was an orange glow from outside. I jumped out of my bed, put on my flowing blue gown, took my staff which was propped up against a straw thatched wall, and pushed through the drape which was used as a door. All around me was chaos. Every one I knew in the village was running around screaming…others were on the floor, with smoke drifting form them, dead. One of the guards went running past, charging towards something, his spear was coated in blood. I watched him run by, and then, another one of those high pitched sounds went off, and what looked like a red florescent seed, shot through him! I gasped as the guard began to gag, and as smoke drifted from his wound. I looked away, and ran towards the city hall. Every where around me, burning huts, smoking bodies-and then, I caught the first sight of what might be responsible. A strange being, was lying on the floor next to one of the huts, obviously dead as he was drenched with blood. I observed its body; it was like nothing I had ever seen before! It was a fit and healthy muscular figure, with black shining torso armour, how ever it was odd as the materials used to make it didn’t look like metal which left the chest bare, and the lower torso visible, here I could see their scaly grey bodies were covered in tattoos. Below that was entirely covered in the same black armour, their feet were bare how ever, they had four clawed toes, then moving up to their arms, they were bear, with no armours, and like the lower torso, grey scaly and covered in black tattoos…and then the heads, the most hideous faces I’ve ever seen. They were grey, scaly, covered in tattoos…but they were covered in huge pulsating light grey boils, and horns! They had numerous eyes on the front of their faces, each orange and the pupils were dilated. I felt light throwing up, but forced it back, and turned towards the City hall. It came closer in view, it wasn’t burning at all. It looked perfectly fine! It white stone walls making this chaotic dismal place look some what worth fighting for. As I came closer, I saw hundreds of the guards on the stairs, stabbing and slicing away at the invaders, and there, for the first time, I new what horrors we were dealing with, I could barely see what they were using from the distance I was at, but now I can tell you they were using weapon known as Laser guns. These weapons shot out molten-hot red seeds of fire out at lightning speed, which burned through anything in their path. As I drew closer, I saw that the guards were losing, they were on the last step of the huge staircase, and the creatures were nearly finished with them.

They had secured all of the stairs, and were not pushing past each other, running over the dead bodies of my fallen comrades. I knew that our town was destroyed. I collapsed to my knees and misery and mourned over the horrors of this day…I still had no idea what was going on…and every one around me was dying. I was not allowed this time of grief for much longer, I heard that sound again, from when the seeds of fire were shot out. I turned, and saw one shooting straight at me. I raised my staff in to the air, in with one word-
‘Canalrus!’ I dematerialized in a flash of light, and the laser shot into the ground. The creature that attempted to kill me looked around cautiously. It spoke to itself…I couldn’t make out its language though. It turned around-that was my chance, I reappeared, clutched my staff with both hands, kneeled on one knee, and then raised it above my head yelling the word-
‘Karandarlru!’ As the creature darted around, I slammed my staff into the ground, and a raging fireball appeared from the orb! The creature rolled over to the left hoping to avoid it, but the fireball changed course, and flew into the creature with an explosion if flame, flesh and blood. I turned back around to see that the creatures had over-run the hall; within minutes they’d be in the king’s chamber…we’d lost the city. As I stood their, I felt a sharp pain in the back of my head. I reached my hand back to it, and then brought it to the level of my eyes, it was printed in blood. The pain grew sharper and my vision went numb. I heard laughing behind me…the things got me when I had my back turned…Cowards. I fell to my knees as the world around me went dark…and then I passed out.

I re-awoke in the main square. It was bright, day in fact. I stood up and looked around. Everyone who was spared in the slaughter were tied up and being monitored by the creatures, the fires had been put out…and the city hall was destroyed, a crumbled ruin.
‘Korri-un-vramb!’ A distorted echoed voice yelled, instantly, two hands grabbed me by the Shoulders, and pushed me back down to my knees! I watched as the creature that did this walked past me and back to his numbers. They all stood in two rows, facing each other in formation. What the hell were they doing? Then, in the distance, heavy drums came into sound, one beat, and then five seconds passed until the next-just this over and over again. Then, through the passage of creatures, a larger one walked through. He wore a red flowing cape which trailed along the ground, and in stead of black, his tattoos and armour were dark red which shone like blood. The creatures bowed as he walked passed them. He stood before us, watching us. One of the boils on his face began to open, revealing teeth and a mouth! He was holding a black metallic box in his hand, which he put in his mouth; he raised his arms and began to speak
‘Humans of planet Earth!’ He bellowed in his dark disturbing voice. ‘We-the Barkonis, have to come to this pathetic rock you call a planet-in search of one of your men, who goes by the name of Velstrom Sinokarb!’ The captives looked around at each other and me in confusion. I was confused as well…how did they know me? The creature wearing red took the device out of his mouth and turned to his warriors.
‘Brrom ghi alqe tosanar!’ He yelled to them. Two of them separated form their ranks and ran off towards one of the huts.
‘We have your lord!’ The one obviously in charge said putting the device back in his mouth. ‘And if Velstrom refuses to co-operate, he shall die!’ The two creatures returned, dragging the bound King across the ground, and then threw him on the floor on front of their leader. ‘Velstrom Sinokarb-stand now!’ He ordered. My king was in danger, I Had no choice. I stood up and walked towards the beast, all eyes on me. The creature studied me carefully, and I stopped in front of him he squinted his seven eyes. ‘You, are Velstrom Sinokarb?’ He asked. I nodded. Seeing as how I couldn’t speak. ‘Very well!’ He grabbed me by the shoulder and threw me to his soldiers. They swarmed around me, as their lord took the communications device from his mouth. ‘Crai brugh orpe alqe Sea!’ He yelled to them. The monsters grabbed me and lifted me off of the ground, carrying me away. If it wasn’t for my tied wrists, I would have lashed out at them, and tried to escape-regardless of how fruitless my attempts would have been without my staff. The creatures laughed and talked amongst each other as they went-it was like listening to the roaring of millions of Flame Demons! Suddenly, everything went brighter, and I felt as though we were going slanted. I tried to look around but my vision was blocked by the creatures. Suddenly, we were straight again, no slant, I looked up and what I thought was the sky at first, was now metallic and covered in ugly bars and bright luminous rectangles I screamed in confusion though my gag, as I realised I was in their stronghold, and I was looking at their ceiling. One of the creatures carrying me turned around and talked for a few seconds. He nodded and then raised his left fist, and smashed me in the face…knocking me out…
Again.

I awoke on a hard metal surface, looking around the bright room I was, there were three of the creatures I understand were called, Barkoni walking around the room, fiddling with objects I wasn’t familiar. I looked up to be met by a harsh bright light shining in to my eyes. I felt something grab my shoulder; I turned around to see one of the creatures looking at me.
‘Lar’r fazik.’ It said. I turned my head to see two other creatures walk over. They were all hunched over, and they held their arms as though they were in straight jackets. These one wore the same armour as the others, but in a white version now. They all slid those communication devices in to their mouths.
‘So, you are this Velstrom we’re hearing about?’ One asked.
‘Listen you, why in god’s name are you abominations doing this to me?’ I asked furiously.
‘You don’t even know what we’re doing, and you presume it’s bad?’
‘Isn’t it?’
‘No, we are purifying you!’ It replied. A spark of curiosity was lit under me at this remark.
‘…purifying me of what?’ I asked.
‘Your putrid Humanity!’ It answered. My spark went out, it was replaced by fear.
‘What do you mean? Wait-why are you doing this anyway, why did you attack my village, why do you want me?’ I cascaded upon them with those questions panicking.
‘I’ll answer all of it now. For the past few months the grand Barkoni, the Lord of people, has spoken in his sleep-of the great Velstrom Sinokarb of Earth, the great destroyer of everything of everything Barkoni, worrying about this prophecy, Captain CroDurge proposed to capture you, he felt that that power should only belong to the Barkoni empire…how ever, our laws indicate only Barkonis are allowed in the empire…so we created a new extremely concentrated form of blood-mixed with evolution cells, to turn you in to one of us!’ It replied.
‘What? You want me to become one of you?’ I yelled.
‘Indeed! How fortunate you are…even, if you don’t know it. We’ve seen your power ratings and your energy levels. They are astounding; imagine that, with all the strength of the Barkoni!’ It laughed gloriously.
‘No wait!’ I yelled, struggling against the cuffs holding me down. Two of them came over and grabbed me by the arms, holding me down in case I was to escape. The third held an object to the level of his eyes, a glass cylinder with numbers on it, holding some odd reddish green liquid, and at the top a large needle. He moved close towards me, I turned my head and saw my staff propped up against the wall.
‘He isn’t putting up much of a fight.’ One of the creatures holding me down laughed.
‘It’s alright. When I inject him with this…trust me, he will.’
‘Let GO of me!’ I Insisted. The creature lent forwards and put one hand on his arm, holding it down. Then, slowly and carefully-he moved the device closer to my arm! I turned my head, and saw my staff propped up against a wall about six feet away, so close away yet so far from my grasp! I tried to bring my staff towards me using my levitation skills, it rattled, but I was in to much distress to concentrate. I couldn’t do it, without a doubt this is was the most horrifying moment in my life. And then, I stopped moving, I stopped trying, I totally froze up. I turned my head, to see that the creature had stabbed me with the device, I watched as the liquid left ht device, and then my arm went numb. Nothing happened for a few minutes, and then I looked at the Barkoni…they were looking at my arm intently. I looked back down to see my arm becoming pale and turning grey, crawling up my arm in scarred movements, with black tattoos swirling and fading in.
‘No!’ I screamed out in protest. I pushed against the bars, trying to escape and grab my staff. It was too late to kill the Barkonis, but not late enough to kill myself. I’d rather die as a human then live as one of them. I raised myself off of my back and pushed against the cuffs, with all my strength. The infection moved up to my hand, I watched as my nails extended and blackened, turning sharp enough to cut through Granite! I remember the pain of the way my skin ripped open and re-formed again, and then hardened to form Scales. The infection moved up to my torso, and then my legs, and then, all that was left was my neck and head…before long; I would have a Bulging porous horned head. No. With a final push, I forced my arms against the shackles, pulling them from the table. The creature’s mouths opened up in shock, as I slashed my clawed hand through the air, and within seconds, my staff flew from the war and in to my hands. Then, the staff shone with a furious bright white light, I pointed the orbed end of it my head…and spoke the word that changed existence. ‘Voromus!’ A brilliant light shot out of the staff and in to my face. Then I realised I had done something wrong. The light subdued, and I began to shine furiously, I thrashed around the room like a Berserker, and my eyes shot out powerful beams of concentrated white fire, melting anything they touched. Looking at this. I whipped my head to the left, causing the beams to slice the three creatures who had transformed me. I watched as their halved entities fell to the floor. I smiled for a moment, but then my expression changed to horribly concerned, I looked at my hands. They were disgusting. These were hands of a beast…my shine faded away. I looked around the room; until I came upon a Mirror on the side wall…my neck was a mix of my old skin and grey and black scars…and apart from two horns growing from the top of my head, poking through the hair that hadn’t malted off. I was about to lose it…but I remembered I had to get out of here, before some one else found me…



Language: Barkonis
Korri: You
Un: Sit
Vramb: Down
Brrom: Bring
Ghi: Out
Alqe: The
Tosanar: Prisoner
Crai: Take
Brugh: Him
Orpe: to
Sea: Ship
Lar: It
Lar’r: It’s
Fazik: Awake